Woo! Love how Xander actually stops and listens, and Willow learns there are consequences to all actions. They're definitely the demon police though lol! And Spike as Master of the Town is always a fantastic read. Love this chapter! Happy writing![Report This]
Willow’s eyes got even bigger. “Why would she want vengeance on us?”
Willow shook her head. “But I didn’t mean for any of that to happen.
THIS right here was always her problem.. I am not guilty or at fault for any of the bad because I DIDN'T MEAN FOR IT TO HAPPEN. So you should not blame me or be mad. Its the one thing I truly hated about Willow.[Report This]
Well, the first part was a bit awkward for me to read, but I'm glad that you updated at all. The rest was well worth the wait. Things are happening and advancing. Xander met the new member, forming his opinion of her without prejudice. Anya is doing something that will fulfill her. And the Initiative is coming to an end sooner or later. Please let it be sooner, it's annoying when Adam takes the stage, mostly because Maggie was so much more compelling as a villain and they did the whole Frankenstein's monster better with the pair of brothers in high school. And there's so many interesting characters they could rescue if the takedown ends up being sooner. (I'm only making suggestions you don't have to follow.)
I'm not sure why the first bit was awkward for you, but I can assure you that there will be no Adam. This will be a strictly 'Maggie as a bad guy' story. The way I'm thinking is that she's gonna be a lot more aggressive about upgrading her troops using 'demon steroids' as opposed to going all 'doctor Frankenstein' out of nowhere.
Dunno if this makes sense, but I felt awkward because it felt like I shouldn't be invading certain private parts of their relationship. I'm floundering attempting to explain it any further than that.
He did one of his 'I'm orally fixated, ask me how' moves with his tongue, and Buffy felt the need to shift in place. Okay, so some of his oral fixation had transferred to her, but really, who could blame her? LOL That's the best description of his tongue moves I've read.
they never want to understand one simple thing: power comes with sacrifice. You know it. The previous Slayer gave her life so you could have this power. I died to get mine. Lots of wisdom there. Good phrasing, great insight. They’re sacrificing both the demons, and their humanity to get the power they crave. Yes, yes, yes! This is just what the Initiative was doing and what made it so very evil. It was nothing like what Buffy and her calling was about, killing demons to protect humans. It was a quest for power and it caused them to lose the better part of their humanity in the quest.
“Because the spell you cast for me let the vampire version of yourself cross into this world. The victims she made, and the vampires she created, are our fault. So Sandy being a vampire is on us.” Yup! I always hated that Riley lured Sandy and staked her in canon.
When did they become the demon police, exactly? Actually, in my mind that is exactly what Buffy's real job has always been. Demons can't be dealt with by human laws and courts. The Slayer is the policing agency for the demon world. If the demon is killing or in other ways needing to be removed, the Slayer does it... judge, jury and if needed executioner. It's not her job to eliminate all demons.
I love where you are taking this, taking them.
Excellent update and yes, worth the wait.
It was a good chapter. Both Buffy and Xander are made to see that humans has to be harmed sometimes and evil doesn't became less evil just because humans is doing it. I loved Spike's attitude.
I like the idea they have for a business, I like that concept.[Report This]
Lovely little tête-à-tête between Buffy & Spike.
Oh, Sandy. I never thought of her as a possibility for Xander's damsel in distress. But she's right. Anya and Willow's spell was responsible for her being turned.
And Xander has a very opportune little epiphany[Report This]
I have to say, this chapter might be beta-less, but it is entirely equal to any chapter I have read in this work or the others that you have posted. And I say this with authority, as I have read them all, repeatedly. Meaning, I'm having a hard time seeing where you need a beta. Your work stands on its own.
Now I am enjoying what you did with the characters, most especially Anya and Spike. You have taken their worst traits and used them to give us open, interesting characters. So, instead of tamping them down, you have allowed them to shine in a more positive light.
And having Spike inform Buffy, in so many words, that she should not be comparing him to a soul having Angel was spot on. This, in itself, is something that a lot of fanfic pieces forgets to take into account, as many continually and repeatedly allow the Angel/Spike comparison to stand unchallenged and few take the trouble to do, what you did, and highlight the difference in comparing a rubber-band soul having vampire with a soulless one.
I have to also say that most overlook Anya or use her for comic relief. In allowing Anya to shine, you have also made it possible for the entire Scooby Gang to become more acquaintance with honesty and truth. So, I am loving this Anya.
One day, I hope to see you return to this work, and with or without a beta, give us the remaining drama and scenes to reach the ending you had planned. Given the way you have ingeniously twisted cannon, I simply cannot figure out how you planned to end it.
Note: This is at least my five reading of this work, and I discover new tidbits every time I read it, meaning, it is so good, it stands the test of time. Thanks for all the hard work and time you invested, it shows.[Report This]