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talesofstories commented on Chapter 8 on February 28, 2021 10:20pm Liked

So, this entire chapter is excellent--especially Spike mocking the less-than-dynamic duo of Buffy and Angel and pointing out that he worked with her much more successfully as well as Buffy enjoying Spike's mocking of Angel--but can we focus on how fabulous Spike's interaction with Frejya is?

“This will not be easy for you, and I cannot say that I am sorry for that, given your propensity for taking that which does not belong to you.” 

Like! She fully knows what his heart's desire is and is readying the popcorn to watch the moralistic tale of the vampire who took things that didn't belong to him and got what he didn't know he wanted the hardest way possible! Aesop could never.

“So, what is it?” he asked.  Then he had a sudden thought.  “Oh, god, it’s not some poncy end-the-world thing like that Acathla bloke, is it?  Please tell me I’m not that far gone!” 

And then he freaks out thinking his heart secretly desires the end of the world! Yes. Love it.

“No, William.  It is worse than that.”   

And then she's like "Oh buddy, when you learn what you want, you are gonna freak. You're gonna wish you wanted to end the world. Where is my popcorn?"

“And how long are we supposed to wait around for him to get his heart’s desire?  I must get Brisingamen back to my lady!  And even if his heart’s desire isn’t world-ending, it can’t be anything good.”

“Yeah, but knowing Spike, it’s probably something like a fancy sword or for his soccer team to win the big cup thing.”

“Oi!  Just because I don’t favor the world ending doesn't mean I don’t have depths, Slayer!  Come to think of it, maybe it brought me here to see my third Slayer done for!” 

And like, I just love how Spike takes his concern that he secretly wants to end the world to Giles, who considers this as a valid thing that Spike might secretly want, until Buffy is like "Have you met this guy? No, seriously. This dude? Want to end the world? When he could instead want something like his soccer team winning? Yeah, no, he's not trying to end the world." Which of course offends Spike even though it is totally, 100% correct.

What they need to give Spike are some magazine quizzes. That would help them narrow it down what he wants and whether they're willing to wait for it. I know that Heidur is very concerned about getting this necklace back ASAP, but Freyja herself seems more than prepared to enjoy how long it takes Spike to figure this out. At the very least, a Cosmo quiz can't make this problem worse.

Author's Response on August 07, 2021 01:23am

Thanks so much for this lovely comment!  I’ve been having a hard time getting back to this story, but seeing how much you liked the scene with Freyja reminds me of how much I enjoyed writing that part. I do plan to finish it. Eventually!  Thanks again for reading and taking the time to comment. Cheers!

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Green commented on Chapter 8 on January 05, 2021 03:16pm Liked

🙄 I mean really, what did Buffy and Angel think was going to happen with an invisible Spike. 

So seems Frejya may knows Spike’s heart’s desire but isn't giving any hints. 

😊 Giles and Spike bonding time; well it was for me anyways. 

Three threatened stakings, two ice-covered tabletops, and one fang-out later, 😁 sounds about right for that negotiation. 

Wonderful 💚

Author's Response on January 08, 2021 08:28pm

Thanks for your comments, Green!  

Yeah, Buffy and Angel should have known better, but they had to learn the hard way, plus Buffy needs to see how Spike isn't taking advantage.

Freyja certainly knows more than she is letting on, but feels Spike deserves some suffering since he stole from her.  I do think she softened towards him when he quoted poetry at her, even though she knows it was his way of trying to get a bite to eat.

With Spike and Giles, I always through they should have connected better in canon, especially once he got his soul.  They both have hard and soft aspects and  know about love and loss.

The negotiation with Heidur, Buffy, and Spike with Giles moderating would certainly be interesting.  Do notice who was the most restrained!wink

Glad you enjoyed it!



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SusanMarieR commented on Chapter 1--The Arrival on January 05, 2021 03:21am

This is a wonderful story and I truly do look forward to more 

Author's Response on January 08, 2021 08:29pm

So nice to see someone new pick this up, SusanMarieR!

Glad you are enjoying it and hope it continues to provide a good read for you.

Thanks for sending me such a nice note!



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magnus374 commented on Chapter 8 on January 04, 2021 12:48pm

 Getting Angel to help finding Spike is a logical idea. I liked how Buffy thought about Angel as a poser here and she is most likely correct. I liked the fight with Spike. We can see that Angel has little to non control over himself and Buffy is seeing that too. Spike is needling Angel very much here, but he could have done so much more damage. Spike  do have his own kind of honour.

Freya apparently decided to seek out Spike herself. The poetry Spike spoke to her could make less hostile and it's clear that she do have an interest in him and the situation. Her attitude seems fitting for one of the old gods. I really like what she said to Spike. Later we could see that she didn't tell Heidur which also fits since this means she can see several scenarios play out for her amusement.

Spike needed information and went to Giles. It was good to see them talk and how the talking made Giles llessinterested in killing Spike. Well, talking do bring people closer and realising that Spike is intelligent probably helped Spike's feelings for him. 

Interesting idea to bring Tyr into this. His idea of justice could involve some fighting though, that was a way to solve disputes. 


Author's Response on January 08, 2021 08:35pm

Thanks for continuing to read and respond to this story, magnus374!

That fight scene was fun and definitely brought out some contrasts between Spike and Angel.  Angel has a facade of calm, but Spike brings out the worst in him.  Buffy is hopefully noticing how Spike is refusing to take advantage of his invisibility.

Glad you think I did justice to Freya.  She definitely doesn't tell her witch everything.  Gods can be finicky that way.  I do think she may cut Spike a little slack because he spoke so prettily to her (even though she knows he was seeming for a bite to eat.)

I do want Giles and Spike to connect better than in canon.  They seem to have much in common and I always thought they should have been better allies after Spike got his soul.  We'll see how we fare with souless Spike.

Thanks for noticing that about Tyr.  I interpreted his story that way too.  We've got two strong warriors, so there will definitely be some sort of contest.  We'll find out what kind in the next chapter or so!



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Amayuscula commented on Chapter 8 on January 04, 2021 10:39am Liked


Author's Response on January 04, 2021 12:14pm

So glad you liked it, Amayuscula!  Thanks for reading and sending me feedback!hearts

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pfeifferpack commented on Chapter 8 on January 04, 2021 04:40am Liked

 with his senses, he’d know very specifically it was her, so all this ‘Look at me, I’m reading so I must be thinking deep thoughts and that makes me a good person’ stuff was just posturing.  Nailed it in one! Wish Buffy had noticed how pretentious he was.

Love Spike having a go at Angel while invisible and getting in some jubes about Angel's hair. Best of all was Angel checking his hair reflexively LOL. Spike's having a bit of fun there.

Angel... no control. No control over his demon. No control over his anger issues. Spike knows him well. Angel is hell-bent on lashing out at the taunting younger vampire even pushing Buffy into the wall! Great guy there.

 I’ve got this little invisibility advantage right now, and that doesn’t seem too fair That really says a lot about him if Buffy thinks about it. Spike could have stayed silent and grabbed and drained her at any time. His sense of honor isn't letting him house the invisibility for anything except to shield him from the witch.

Quoting poetry, an ode to her beauty, to Frejya might work to soften her ire. “This will not be easy for you, and I cannot say that I am sorry for that, given your propensity for taking that which does not belong to you.”  Maybe she'll at least call off the hit on him, have Heidur stand down a bit and just watch in amusement as Spike discovers just who is his heart's desire. He's really going to be upset once he puts it all together. Knowing what loving Buffy tends to do to Spike I think it's punishment enough and maybe the goddess will agree.

she said it was gonna be worse than Acathla!  Not sure how that plays out.  Never been one for ending the world or even dominating it, Oh, Spike, it is much worse. It's you remaking yourself for the love of the Slayer. It's you shedding the Big Bad personae and becoming a man, a good man, to win your desire.

“You got me, Slayer.  Been having a right old canoodle with old Rupes here.”  That did tickle him and embarrass Giles to no end. Oops, Buffy. Don't use a word when you don't know its meaning.

“I’ve got plenty of control, missy!  Kept my cool when we had that truce last year, didn’t I?” Indeed. She should remember that. 

Nice snark from Buffy here “Settle in, everyone, it’s time for a history lesson.” 

 He set aside for the moment that Spike seemed quite familiar with the legends of Tyr  Glad that Giles is using that big squishy brain of his and actually sizing up Spike instead of making assumptions.

Giles has learned so much that he'll need to consider especially if Spike DOES get his heart's desire in the end.

Glad they finally got Heidur to realize the torc would dust with Spike if she does kill him. He won't need to keep Willow's magic going at least (unless Angel has some revenge in mind for his arse being kicked and humiliated).

Excellent update. I'm looking forward to the invocation and what the justice is perceived to be after the case is laid out.


Author's Response on January 04, 2021 12:30pm

Thanks so much for these comments, pfeifferpack!  You picked up on some of the very things that I hope will give readers some hints.  And you've given me some ideas to add to when Tyr is called and Freyja also makes an appearance!

I do want Giles to use his brain about Spike (and Angel) and not just rely on his Council training.  Hopefully, he can help Buffy in this as well.  She's got a fair ways to go, just as Spike does.

I'm still undecided if Freyja will involve herself with Angel at all.  I can see some possibilities there, but maybe I'll just have her hint at them near the end.  I want to keep the story centered on Spike and Buffy and the Scoobies for the most part.



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Dontia commented on Chapter 8 on January 04, 2021 03:56am Liked

Such an interesting story. I’m enjoying it very much.

Author's Response on January 04, 2021 12:17pm

Thanks for your comment, Dontia!  So glad you are enjoying the story!biggrin

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pfeifferpack commented on Chapter 7 on December 29, 2020 03:32am Liked

So glad this is (and you) are back! 

Yes, this witch is scary powerful, far more than Willow at this point in time. Very glad Willow chose to help Spike though and nice she's not wanting him dead.

Giles was cool as a cucumber and nicely written in his interrogation and negotiation with the witch. 

The necklace IS fulfilling its purpose. Buffy is his hearts desire he just hasn't figured that out yet.

They should let it all play out then the necklace can be returned without bloodshed! Not likely though.

Excellent update.


Author's Response on December 31, 2020 07:14pm

Thanks for your kind comments, Kathleen!

I’m so glad Giles came across that way. I think my Giles has better integrated his Ripper-ish parts than was shown in canon. 

Yes, poor Spike has grabbed an artifact that is going to drag him, possibly kicking and screaming, to where we know he should be. Won’t be smooth, but that’s the fun (or the angst). 

You are right that Heidur isn’t going to be willing to wait and she is nothing if not dedicated to what she believes is right. 



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magnus374 commented on Chapter 7 on December 28, 2020 12:02pm

Good, Giles is acting very competent here. He make sure that he is safe and he avoided insulting the powerful witch. Well, she didn't like the situation but Giles was rather polite. He is well aware of the danger Heidur present and make sure the others know that too. Spike is trying to plan things well too but he do need information.

Good to see Heidur talking to Freya.

Author's Response on December 31, 2020 07:25pm

Thanks for continuing to support my story!

I like a competent Giles. Never like it when he just gets hit in the head all the time. 

Glad you liked seeing a bit of Freya.  She will be back. Could be a little or maybe a lot!  We’ll see!



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Green commented on Chapter 7 on December 28, 2020 03:37am Liked

Was really happy to see this updated. 

Giles is smart not to trust Heidur.

Wonderful 💚


Author's Response on December 31, 2020 07:16pm

Thanks for sticking with me, Green!

Yes, Heidur is trouble for sure!



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qt_pi_24_7 commented on Chapter 6-Revisions on January 09, 2020 06:56pm Liked

 So happy you're back! Love this!!!

Author's Response on January 13, 2020 08:19pm

Thanks!  I never go far, just so busy reading that I don’t make the time to write. 

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gabelou1991 commented on Chapter 6-Revisions on January 09, 2020 05:40pm

J'aime bien. 

Author's Response on January 13, 2020 08:18pm

Merci!  So glad you are enjoying it!

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Green commented on Chapter 6-Revisions on January 07, 2020 01:03pm Liked

Awesome chapter. I always love it when Buffy gets to over hear Spike in conversations about love and his feeling or Angel that way she doesn't think he'd lying and now she has lots to think about.

Hopefully she'll start to see him before the spell wears off and they'll both realize she no longer wants to kill him. 💚

Author's Response on January 08, 2020 05:08pm

Thanks so much for reading and commenting. I too love the “overheard” info. Buffy has a lot to consider and it will take a bit. Remember that Spike has killed already and that weighs heavily with her. I’m a HEA fan though, and characters have to do what I tell them...😋

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 6-Revisions on January 05, 2020 06:16am

Of course leaving a dangerous witch unconscious on Giles sofa, makes perfect sense, there couldn't possible be any chance of her doing anything rash when she awakens😁

It does seem like Spike is over Dru, he has been doing some thinking. I did like his interaction with Willow. He did scare her, but it could have been so much worse and at times he was actually friendly. I wasn't actually sure if the spell would work on Buffy, since there is a strong possibility that she really doesn't want him dead. The conversation she overheard rid give Buffy something to think about.

Author's Response on January 06, 2020 02:48pm

Hi!  Thanks so much for commenting. I wouldn’t worry about Heidur being able to do something rash. Giles is no fool and is going to be careful. 

Buffy really does have things to think about now.  Whether she’ll make allowances for how non-evil Spike has been with Willow is yet to be seen. The death of the store owner will weigh heavily with her.  

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pfeifferpack commented on Chapter 6-Revisions on January 05, 2020 03:15am Liked

 Then he would figure out how to get free of the damned artifact, and get back to living his unlife -- free of the woman who couldn’t seem to love him despite a century of devotion, and free from a Slayer who tasted of a heaven he’d never know.  Well, one thing has happened during his quest... he's given up on Dru. The one thing that caused him to start down this path is now something he doesn't want any longer. Of course, he still doesn't realize WHY or what he actually wants but he's at least done with the past.

Good that Buffy is having that internal dialogue and recognizing that neither she nor Spike seems to be in a hurry to kill the other.

Giles blowing off the description of the Torc tickled me. That's the whole reason for this mess and he treats it as a trifle LOL.

I'm enjoying Spike's interaction with Willow. Truly they should all be surprised at how non-lethal he's been with her. Yeah, he's scary but he's been rather decent with her nonetheless.

Probably a good guess about what the torc is. Love that Spike knew exactly what Willow was talking about. He would know his mythology or I always thought he'd be the sort who read a lot and loved things of that nature.

It worked well for Spike that Buffy showed up because it proved the magic worked.

Excellent update.


Author's Response on January 06, 2020 03:01pm

Thanks so much for commenting, Kathleen. You quoted one of my favorite lines from this chapter. That it stood out for you makes me happy. Spike is definitely hurting, but ready to adapt as he is so good at doing. 

Giles often misses a key piece at the onset. He’ll get there eventually. (Thinking of how in the series he accurately theorized a dancing demon right at the start of OMWF, then dismissed his own idea. )

Hopefully Buffy will weigh Spike’s treatment of Willow in her consideration along with his killing of the shop owner. But, that will always weigh heavily with her. She wouldn’t be who she was if she could let that slide easily. 

My headcanon has Spike knowing his mythology quite well. Probably much better than me!  Glad that as the author I can make it serve my needs!

Let’s see how long he stays invisible to Buffy. It’s going to be interesting to see them dance that dance for a bit, but he won’t take lethal advantage- not his style to have an unfair fight. 



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vicdave99 commented on Chapter 6-Revisions on January 04, 2020 11:33pm Liked

🇬🇧 Great chapter.

Author's Response on January 05, 2020 02:36am

Thanks!  Glad you enjoyed it!

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fyreburned commented on Chapter 5-Found and Lost on July 01, 2019 09:29am Liked


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gabelou1991 commented on Chapter 5-Found and Lost on June 28, 2019 06:42pm

J'aime beaucoup.

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Green commented on Chapter 5-Found and Lost on June 28, 2019 05:01am Liked

Awesome chapter 💚

Author's Response on June 28, 2019 04:02pm

Thanks for reading!  Glad you are enjoying it. applause

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pfeifferpack commented on Chapter 5-Found and Lost on June 28, 2019 03:42am Liked

Love seeing this update! 

Wonderfully written action sequences. Your Heidur is formidable and frightening.

I love Spike accidentally confiding all to Willow. That is so in character. When he was given just an inch of being treated in a non-hostile way he reacted in a human manner. He needed someone to talk to and Willow can be quite sympathetic.

Interesting that Giles made Buffy re-read about William the Bloody. No doubt he wanted to remind her that Spike is dangerous and evil. 

So now Buffy has pulled Heidur out of harm's way but I doubt the witch will be grateful.

I suspect the person or demon who suggested Spike get the torc to win back Dru had an ulterior motive. That is someone that might be even more dangerous in the long run. Certainly seems that Spike has been played. 

Your S3 Spike voice is PERFECT! You really have nailed him.

Excellent update.


Author's Response on June 30, 2019 02:33pm

Thanks so much for this great review, Kathleen!  Work has been disappointing recently and so I'm hoping to carve out more regular time to do the things that make me writing this story!

I hadn't intended Buffy to rescue Heidur, but I think it will give her and Giles a chance to learn more of what they need to know.  As long as Heidur doesn't think they are interfering!  She is powerful and frightening in her defense of her goddess.

I haven't settled on whether the demon who sent Spike off was just trying to get rid of him or if maybe, just maybe there is more to it than that.  Not sure he's dangerous, but was he put in Spike's way for a reason?  Could be!

Thank you for your comment on Spike's voice.  Staying authentic to S3 is a challenge with both our heros, especially as I do intend a Spuffy ending place.  How to balance Buffy's youth/inexperience/being stuck to Watcher's Council lore with her growing experience of loss and pain alongside Spike's evilness/desire to kill Slayers/recent parting from Dru is both fun and difficult.  Hoping I can keep that authentic S3 voice going while growing them into something more.



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magnus374 commented on Chapter 5-Found and Lost on June 27, 2019 03:40pm

Poor Willow this is scary for her. Spike is chaotic most of the time and with the mood he is in, It's impossible to know what he will do.

Spike really should be more careful on what to trust but he was drunk of course.

Let's see what Giles has to say about this.

It's probably worrisome for Heidur too, she must worry that Freya will get impatient.

Author's Response on June 30, 2019 02:23pm

Willow is pretty scared, but Spike is pretty scary at this point as you noted--hard to predict what he'll do.

Giles will definitely be having his say.

Heidur is so dedicated to Freya...perhaps going too far on her behalf?  We'll see!


Thanks for continuing to follow my story!



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Pencilcomet commented on Chapter 4-Hide and Seek on March 22, 2019 04:18pm Liked

Great chapter!

Author's Response on March 29, 2019 05:56pm

Thanks for following my story!smile

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 4-Hide and Seek on March 16, 2019 07:06am

I really liked what we could see in Spike's mind while he was walking through Buffy's house. He is evil but he felt a little bit uncomfortable about breaking his word. For some reason I greatly enjoyed how Spike noticed that Buffy at some point had faked a book report by watching the movie instead.

It seemed so very fitting that Spike would sleep in Buffy's bad and leave the apple to show that he had been there.

The Scoobies seems more worried about the witch at this point and considering that she is an unknown factor (and in connection with a goddess) that makes sense.

Author's Response on March 29, 2019 06:02pm

Thanks, magnus374!

I'm having fun imagining being in Spike's head.

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ginar369 commented on Chapter 4-Hide and Seek on March 15, 2019 11:24pm Liked


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Glad you liked it!

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pfeifferpack commented on Chapter 4-Hide and Seek on March 15, 2019 09:03pm Liked

So Spike has taken Willow captive to work on getting rid of the torc on his neck. No Xander though so that's likely good. Spike being sober is also a plus.

I love his napping in Buffy's bed and leaving the apple as an "I was here" for her to find LOL.

Having Buffy read up on the Whirlwind would be useful if only to put Angelus in perspective not just Spike!

It's a good thing that they are seeing the witch trailing Spike as more of a threat than he is at this point. It'll save him from a dusting long enough to save him in the end.

Great update.


Author's Response on March 29, 2019 06:01pm

Thanks, Kathleen!  I may have to flash back to some of the stuff she read during this little research session in later chapters.  Of course, we know that the Watcher's COuncil always spins things their own way.  Maybe Spike can give her some perspective. wink

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Green commented on Chapter 4-Hide and Seek on March 15, 2019 07:52pm Liked

😁 awesome chapter 💚

Author's Response on March 29, 2019 06:02pm

Thanks for reading, Green! smile

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PixelatedPoppy commented on Chapter 3--Hints and Traces on November 04, 2018 11:39am Liked

Good luck with NaNoWriMo, but I hope your muse can switch back to this after, as we need more of this lovely.

It's great to see Buffy more relaxed and upbeat now she seems to have put her relationship with Angel in to proper perspective. It'll be better for her in the long run.

Buffy frowned a little at the memory of having to dust the incapacitated creature.  This seems to have affected Buffy more than she cares to admit.  

I'm glad Buffy remembers that Spike kept his half of the truce. Hopefully, another truce can be agreed.

Oz looked thoughtful, then wondered aloud, “Not sure whether “the enemy of my enemy is my friend” fits here.”  He shot a pointed look at Buffy.  Oz is smart and insightful. He's right too, the witch can't be trusted.

If she could do that just looking for information, what would she do to Spike when she found him? Buffy seems to have some conflicting thoughts re: Spike. It's almost like she could be a little worried about him.  Something is off, as she doesn't want to fight him. She's simply curious to hear his side.

I hope he is finished with Dru. She can never love him the way he wants her to.  

Typical Spike. The only vampire who would think it a good idea to hide out in the home of his mortal enemy.  He's either brilliant or as insane as his sire.

Brilliant.  heart Can't wait to read more.



Author's Response on November 05, 2018 12:39pm

I always thought Oz had his head on straight and that the gang could have benefitted from more of his advice.  

Spike has a definite contrarian streak to him, so the house on Revello is just too tempting!

Glad you are enjoying this.



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PixelatedPoppy commented on Chapter 2--Changing Plans on November 04, 2018 11:14am Liked

Love how you've tied this chapter to the previous one with the Wednesday being a lot like Tuesday. :) 

Xander and Willow trying to ignore their lusty feelings and not quite succeeding.  This is the Lovers Walk ep from series 3, so I'm assuming Spike will be intercepting them soon.

The sound of the kernels softly exploding into fluffy yumminess reminded her of the sound a vamp made as it dusted on the end of her stake, and suddenly she was back to the reality that was her life.  Poor Buffy, can't escape her calling anywhere.

but with a sense of having avoided disaster. Sadly, for Judith I doubt she has.  But, Spike killing her is a reminder that at this point in canon, pre-chip, he's still a predator, still dangerous. He's only doing what comes naturally to a vampire.

She knew he regretted the things he had done when his soul had been stripped away, but did he regret them because they were wrong or because they got in the way of him redeeming himself in the eyes of the Powers that Be? Good question, Buffy. It's nice to see this more reflective Buffy.  She's sad, but she seems more over Angel than she had been in canon at this point. I like how you are tweaking canon. 

She growled, seeing no sign of her thief, and dropped the useless, and now thoroughly brain-dead, husk atop her last supper. Seriously scary.  I'm hoping Buffy and Spike can come to another truce, so that they can defeat her together.  Heidur, might prove too much to take on alone, even for a slayer.

I'm glad that Buffy has a sense of fairness and felt conflicted at dusting the mind-wiped vampire. Now, she needs to go see Giles pronto, and get some answers.

This is shaping up to be a great story.  Loving it. hearts


Author's Response on November 05, 2018 12:36pm

Glad you are still loving it!  Thanks for all the amazing comments!

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PixelatedPoppy commented on Chapter 1--The Arrival on November 04, 2018 10:18am Liked

Really lovely writing. This looks very interesting.

Was there something more she should be doing?  Was killing always the right answer? It's really good to see Buffy contemplating this question.  Even after a couple of years of her calling, of having to dust vampires almost nightly, and all the really painful stuff that's happened to her, she's still in touch with her humanity. 

She should tell them he's back. They're only going to find out anyway and then predictably be upset with her for not telling, but I can kinda understand why she doesn't, as they've often proven they can be judgemental.  Anyhow, Buffy was never one for spilling her feelings.  

Lovely reaction to her test scores.  She shouldn't be so shocked, she's smart. It was only her lack of sleep (nightly slaying) and class time that held her back.  Love the babbling brook, brilliant Buffy voice here.  

As the sun fell into the ocean that evening, a waxing moon... Wow, who knew a description of a car cruising down a road could be so poetic.  Like I say, really lovely writing.  It's just the right amount of description, just enough that it doesn't disrupt the pacing or stops the reader from filling in their own details. It's a hard balancing act, but you've got it spot on. I love this kind of writing, so I can imagine that I'm really going to enjoy reading this.

He half-heartedly pulled at the heavy collar.  So, I take it the Torc is some kind of metal collar that he can't remove.  A witch and a Norse goddess. What has he gotten himself into now?  Our boy never does things by half.

Heidur's definitely a threat, pushing into people's memories and minds without their consent, and no thought or concerns as to their feelings in the matter. I suppose we have to be thankful she hasn't left them dead.

Off to read the next chapters.  heart


Author's Response on November 05, 2018 12:35pm

So glad you are enjoying this!  Thanks for the lovely comments.  I especially appreciate hearing when I've got someone's "voice" sounding right and that the balance of description v. action is good.  I'll keep working to make that happen.



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pfeifferpack commented on Chapter 3--Hints and Traces on November 03, 2018 04:04am Liked

I'm glad Buffy remembers that Spike did as he promised with the truce. He did say that he'd not come back so she is wondering why he broke that promise. He hasn't come to her so she is curious.

Oz looked thoughtful, then wondered aloud, “Not sure whether “the enemy of my enemy is my friend” fits here.”  He shot a pointed look at Buffy. Oz is smart enough to know that just because the witch is after Spike that doesn't make her a "good guy".

Giles will be busy researching. Knowing there is a goddess involved they need to know what they are dealing with.  Given what she is the goddess of it might be interesting how she does deal with Spike if she involves herself.

“I’m keeping that in mind,” she told Oz. Good. Don't be complacent with this witch. What she is willing and able to do to get information is chilling.

I think Buffy is at least a little worried about Spike though she'd never admit to it.

I hope Spike really IS done with Dru. He deserves someone who can love him properly and she can't even if she wanted to. 

He's not going to be able to rest with the witch on his trail.

Excellent update.


Author's Response on November 05, 2018 12:32pm

Thanks, Kathleen!  I always felt Oz had his head on straight and that the gang should have paid more attention to him.

I do have plans for a Frejya/Spike scene.  Your comments have given me some food for thought there.

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