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mhustler commented on Chapter 1 - Caught on December 08, 2019 06:22pm

Hope you come back one day

Author's Response on April 01, 2020 09:56pm

Thanks for the kind comment. I do have plans of returning to this fic one day, but I have to write what the muse commands. 

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Badwolfjedi commented on Chapter 1 - Caught on September 24, 2018 11:09pm Liked

Oh!! Wowie! This is a fabulous opener! I somehow missed when you posted, sorry about that. Ugh so many feels! It’s brillant from beginning to end!!

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Author's Response on September 25, 2018 12:54am

Aww, thanks so much! I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. hug

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Lonelygirl commented on Chapter 1 - Caught on January 29, 2018 05:39pm

Omg I’ve been trying to find the complete chapter this is such a good story! Don’t leave it incompleted it’s too great. Hope for an update soon. 

Author's Response on February 09, 2018 01:55am

This is the complete chapter, and there WAS more of this written (just not posted) but my hard drive crashed and I lost everything. I do plan to continue it at some point though, and will update ASAP/ Thanks for the review, I'm glad you're interested in the story. 

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-Carrie-Ann- commented on Chapter 1 - Caught on January 05, 2018 08:01am Liked

Duh, duh, duuuuhhh! OMG, I guess they've been caught.

You've really wet my appetite with this excellent beginning, I can't wait to read what you post next!

Loved it, it's going right onto the favourite list 😍 x

Author's Response on January 22, 2018 01:40am

Yes, they have. 

I'm so glad you are intrigued by the beginning of this! I'll update asap, but that involves rewriting chapters that got eaten by my harddrive crash. I won't leave it hanging for too long. 

Thanks for the review! hug

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pfeifferpack commented on Chapter 1 - Caught on December 16, 2017 10:26pm Liked

YAY you are coming back to work on this one.

Love the way you get us into Buffy's head immediately. She is miserable and unhappily married. Bet there is more than just her husband focusing on work going on there. Spike clearly is emotionally involved while she has at least tried to make it all about the physical release. 

Now they are caught. Her husband has focused his wrath on her initially but I imagine he'll have lots to say to Spike too. It will be interesting to see how this all falls out.

Great opening. Happy you will be continuing it.

Kathleen

Author's Response on January 22, 2018 01:39am

Yes, I am coming back to work on this one. I don't like leaving WIP's, so posting it here was a way of forcing myself to continue it. At least, that's the plan.

THEY are definitely in different places at this moment, that's for sure. 

I'm glad you enjoyed the first chapter sweets, and hope you enjoy future updates, when they come. 

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Spuffygirl commented on Chapter 1 - Caught on December 16, 2017 10:18pm

This has a lot of potential.popcorn

You should show flashbacks or go back and write how they met ect. to get to this point.

I really hope this is more. There aren't enough AU Human fics anymore.

 

 

Author's Response on January 22, 2018 01:37am

Aww, thanks, I'm glad you liked it. 

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Elianne commented on Chapter 1 - Caught on December 16, 2017 04:29pm

Right in the middle of things.. hot, intense and with complications waiting to happen.. looking forward to the next chapter..

Author's Response on January 22, 2018 01:37am

Yep, right in the middle. I'm glad you liked the intensity of it. Thanks for the review! 

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Green commented on Chapter 1 - Caught on December 16, 2017 12:39pm Liked

Great start. AH fic's are my favorite followed by baby and claim fic's. 

Author's Response on January 22, 2018 01:36am

Thanks for the review, I'm glad you enjoyed it! 

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Amasirol commented on Chapter 1 - Caught on December 16, 2017 12:19pm Liked

Whoa. Starting off a story like that has me completely hooked! While it could stand as a one-shot, I can only imagine what sparked Buffy’s recklessness with Spike and what her hubby (angel? Riley?) was also doing in his own life to let her feel neglected. This has undertones of the affair in season 6. I hope you get back into the swing of things with this story because I’d like to read more.

Author's Response on January 22, 2018 01:36am

Hooked! Awesome. It could definitely stand as a one-shot, and perhaps I should've reworked it to make it just that, but I do plan on continuing this at some point. As for the hubby...I'm not going to spoil who, but I think you may be surprised. 

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kimothyschma commented on Chapter 1 - Caught on December 16, 2017 11:39am Liked

First of all, I am obsessed with AHs, so I’m excited to see a “new” one from you. I think you’re doing a good job so far of translating canon Spuffy to AH.

I thought this chapter was a little hard to get into at first because I didn’t know who was involved or how they got there. But I actually liked that you started right in the middle of the affair and the point of discovery. Because I think we can all imagine what happened and will probably only need minimal flashbacks. Plus now I am so ready for the angst and the drama! Buffy cheating on Riley (although we don’t know who the husband is!) with Spike is one of my favorite little mini genres, and you already told us a lot in this one chapter, so I’m excited to see where you go with this! I’m wondering if there’ll be some sort of a twist in the next chapter, since I think I know it all. ;)

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Author's Response on January 22, 2018 01:35am

Yes, a "new" one. I actually had the first five chapters written, but the next four disappeared in The Harddrive Crash of 2007. I WILL be getting back to this fic at some point, and continuing it. And I'm pleased you thought it transferred well from canon to AH.

  • I thought this chapter was a little hard to get into at first because I didn’t know who was involved or how they got there.

Ahhh... because that's what I was going for. There are no names, or physical descriptors written in this first chapter for a reason. wink

  • But I actually liked that you started right in the middle of the affair and the point of discovery. Because I think we can all imagine what happened and will probably only need minimal flashbacks. Plus now I am so ready for the angst and the drama!

Yep, lots of angst and drama will be coming, for sure. 

  • Buffy cheating on Riley (although we don’t know who the husband is!) with Spike is one of my favorite little mini genres, and you already told us a lot in this one chapter, so I’m excited to see where you go with this! I’m wondering if there’ll be some sort of a twist in the next chapter, since I think I know it all. ;)

Well, the husband hasn't been named, but he will be in the next chapter.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! 

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Chapstick commented on Chapter 1 - Caught on December 16, 2017 09:38am Liked

You perfectly captured the mood, emotion and feelings - what a great opening chapter. I could feel the horrible inevitability of them being caught building throughout. I’m so looking forward to the next chapter. 

Author's Response on January 22, 2018 01:32am

Awww, thanks! I'm glad you felt what I was aiming for with this opener. 

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 1 - Caught on December 16, 2017 08:05am

We are placed right into the action, through Buffy's thoughts we did learn about her situation and what would lead her to this. It was some hot action and a good way to start this.

Author's Response on January 22, 2018 01:32am

I'm glad you enjoyed how it started. I wrote this a very long time ago, so it's good that it stands the test of time. 

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Sunalso commented on Chapter 1 - Caught on December 16, 2017 05:55am Liked

 

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