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davidf89 commented on Chapter 15 - Boiling Point on April 07, 2020 03:30am

Brilliant idea and I enjoyed reading this story. Will be there a sequel as I would like to know what happens to Angelus and Vamp Connor?

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Elephant3 commented on Prologue - Hell's Bells Revisited on November 14, 2017 09:04am

Really enjoyed this. Would love a dark sequel. 

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123Sonja commented on Chapter 14 - The Plan on October 23, 2017 02:54am Liked


 

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 15 - Boiling Point on October 17, 2017 11:30am

An open ending. This leaves a lot of lose ends, but so does real life. 

This chapter held several surprises, a lot of things I didn't expect, but it does make sense. The soldiers had to be killed and Angelus is good at that. It will be difficult for Buffy to understand that though. I liked that we saw Cordelia and Harmony at the end.

Some people died but the world is saved, for now.

I have enjoyed this story. It had no real happy ending and had a lot of darkness but that also made it very "real", good job.

Author's Response on October 17, 2017 02:49pm

Thank you so much! You have been a loyal and insightful reader!

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 14 - The Plan on October 17, 2017 11:17am

Of course Spike would be able to feel Dru's death. The things he said is another example of how giving a vampire a soul is wrong. It's probably for the best that they don't see Willow for awhile.

Ethan can't be trusted but he is their enemy's enemy.

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Priceless commented on Chapter 15 - Boiling Point on October 17, 2017 10:20am Liked

Faith and Kenneth getting shot! Angelus biting Connor! Harmony saves the day and is that Cordy with her? A wonderful duo.  But so many questions left - is Spike dust? Where are Willow and Tara? Are they together forever?  I think this definitely deserves a sequel to answer these questions hearts

Author's Response on October 17, 2017 11:42am

Yes, that is Cordelia. I love the idea of the two of them together. We must assume Spike is alive. I would certainly never kill him off camera. Let's just hope Buffy can forgive her for setting Angelus loose. Tara is still dead. Willow is in a prison somewhere, mourning the death of Oz and feeling very lonely. 

I doubt there will be a sequel. This seems like a good place to end things. The Scoobies are back together. An apocalypse is averted, but the world is still in peril.

Hope you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading it all and being so supportive write

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Priceless commented on Chapter 14 - The Plan on October 17, 2017 09:56am Liked

Oh no, it starts out so well, but that ending is worrying.  I am hoping Spoike shocked is wrong and it's going to end very well.  Can't wait to read the next episode scythe

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Joyce commented on Chapter 2 - Reunion Revisited on October 16, 2017 04:52pm Liked

This has gotten so strange. Kate sure gave Angel a talking to. Maybe I should have re-read the previous two chapters to get a bead of what was going on?

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loopy commented on Chapter 3 - Sanctuary Revisited on September 23, 2017 05:47pm Liked

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 13 - Istanbul - 2027 on September 22, 2017 11:23am

This chapter held several surprises. I didn't expect Oz and Willow in this way. Well, it make sense for Willow to seek out some support and I agree with what she said. That he shouldn't suppress the wolf, he should master it instead. I didn't expect what would happen either, well done. At the end we could see the danger from the Initiative.

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Priceless commented on Chapter 13 - Istanbul - 2027 on September 22, 2017 07:18am Liked

Best chapter yet.  Woz gave me so many feels. Oh Oz, why??  WHY??? weep Amazing WFB, loved and hated it, but beautifully written.

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Priceless commented on Chapter 12 - Return of the Vampire Slayer on September 18, 2017 05:23pm Liked

This was an exciting chapter, my favourite so far.  It's so good to see Buffy fighting again, you wrote those scenes so well. Enjoyed the Spuffy loving, especially that it was out doors and Spike is worried about being seen lol. Excellent, can't wait to read more

Author's Response on September 18, 2017 06:11pm

Thank you so much, Pricey! It was time to get Buffy back in the game. I got carried a way with the Spuffy scene. Caught myself just before I started writing porn. stake

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Priceless commented on Chapter 11 - The Girl in the Coal-Bin on September 18, 2017 05:20pm Liked

Spike and Dawn discussing the past is great, so glad he didn't go into that bathroom.  i love his disillusionment and the 'tired old woman' comment - I'm sure he'll come to regret that.

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Meavepagan commented on Chapter 12 - Return of the Vampire Slayer on September 18, 2017 02:08pm Liked

Wow.  Greay chapter

  I cant wait to see what hsppens next.

Author's Response on September 18, 2017 03:12pm

Wohey! Thank you! Things are about to get serious. Stuff will happen. Stay tuned.

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 12 - Return of the Vampire Slayer on September 18, 2017 01:43pm

Buffy seems to have got some of her fire back and Spike finally snapped out of it. Dawn is saved from that but there are so many problems and complications. Well, it makes it interesting.

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 11 - The Girl in the Coal-Bin on September 18, 2017 01:34pm

The way the dreamscape (or whatever we should call it) was written, that was great. There was such sadness over how Dawn wanted out in the world again, how she needed someone to see her. Her prisoner status now is another disturbing thing. We can see that the memories of her is getting back, now that she's out.

Spike seems somewhat broken at the end, tired and ready to give up.

Author's Response on September 18, 2017 03:11pm

Happy to hear you're enjoying yourself. I love Dawn. She deserves a kinder author. Thank you so much for your continued readership and your comments.

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DeamonQueen commented on Chapter 10 - Where Do You Go When You've Been Forgotten? Close Your Eyes. Let's Hit Rock Bottom! on September 11, 2017 01:57am Liked

Is Spike their prisoner? Or is he in another place? I got confused. First he was tied up, then at the end he was sitting with Dawn. Was that part a dream or was that real?

Author's Response on September 11, 2017 01:21pm

Sorry! I'll try to clear it up for you. :p

Spike is the prisoner of Wolf, Ram and Hart 

Dawn has disappeared from reality. Even the people who knew her cannot remember her. In the chapter Babysitter, Spike start to remember Dawn. Then Drusilla shows up and tells him that he is an anchor tying Dawn to reality. Wolf, Ram and Hart will use Spike's connection to Dawn to bring Dawn back into existence.

The last bit of this chapter is just a little teaser for the next chapter. Do you remember the scene with Dawn and Spike from Crush? It will hopefully become clearer by the next chapter.

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Priceless commented on Chapter 10 - Where Do You Go When You've Been Forgotten? Close Your Eyes. Let's Hit Rock Bottom! on September 10, 2017 02:02pm Liked

So much goodness; Harmony in a burka, Willow on her yellow brick road, Dawn and Spike together. Looking forward to Buffy remembering Dawn and seeing Spike again hearts

Author's Response on September 10, 2017 02:21pm

Thank you! You seem to have guessed where Willow is going :p 

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The next two chapters are all Buffy, Spike and Dawn. 

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 10 - Where Do You Go When You've Been Forgotten? Close Your Eyes. Let's Hit Rock Bottom! on September 10, 2017 06:29am

 During the fight with the vampires, I had one thought, are the rules different now or doesn't the ranch count as a home?

Interesting part with Spike and Wolfram and Hart, we got to see more of how they are planning things. I did like how Dru was written. The little glimpse of Dawn was both interesting and sad. 

People has a hard time understanding that the balance need to be restored in order for the world to funktion. A world without darkness is just as bad as one without light. If I remember it correctly, so did Whistler introduce himself as a balance demon, not one working for good. 

Now for something different. Balance seems good to me, that's why it never made sense in Star Wars how the balance could be restored by killing the users of the dark side. 

Author's Response on September 10, 2017 09:11am

Good spot. I added a bit at the beginning to explain how the vampires are able to enter the ranch. It is a bit of a handwave.

I'm glad you liked the bit with Spike and Dru. It is great fun to imagine the interaction between Dru and Spike-with-soul.

magnus374 Replied on September 10, 2017 01:33pm

Good, now that part make sense.

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DianaM commented on Chapter 10 - Where Do You Go When You've Been Forgotten? Close Your Eyes. Let's Hit Rock Bottom! on September 10, 2017 02:10am Liked

The story seems confusing at times but I'm sort of hooked.

I do hope Spike and/or Buffy find a way to save Dawn though: it would have been very painful for them to "regain" her, only to lose again, this time permanently,

Author's Response on September 10, 2017 09:14am

Thank you! Please, tell me if there are parts of the story that are too confusing/frustrating to read. I love to maintain a sense of mystery, so the confusion is often intentional, but I may not be the best ever writer :p

The upcoming chapters are all about Spike, Buffy and Dawn. So, if you want to know Dawn's fate, you need only to keep reading :p

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Priceless commented on Chapter 9 - Harm's Way Revisited on September 09, 2017 12:48pm Liked

Great to see Harmony and Cordelia back together again. Love them both, and so happy Harmony got to dispatch the bad guys.  Hope Cordy and Angel meet up again, I've always wished we could have seen Cangel play out.  Great stuff WFB, so glad you've put it on EF party

Author's Response on September 09, 2017 01:10pm

Thank you so much, Pricey. However, I am going to have to disappoint you. I am trying to set up for a Spuffy reunion here. There is no time for Cangel. Maybe in the sequel.

For now, get ready for ...hug

Priceless Replied on September 09, 2017 01:58pm

Oh I am always ready for Spuffy.  Excited to see it hug 

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DeamonQueen commented on Chapter 9 - Harm's Way Revisited on September 09, 2017 11:21am

I just reread the chapter. Glad you fixed the spacing. When I read it I had a problem. So thanks for that!

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DeamonQueen commented on Chapter 9 - Harm's Way Revisited on September 09, 2017 08:27am Liked

This is a really interesting story, confusing though at times due to the fact that there are no indications on when you start to shift places or when you did put indications I can't tell where you placed it until I read about the characters. But anyway, it is interesting and hope to read more. Good luck and see you in the next chapter.


 

Author's Response on September 09, 2017 08:49am

Thank you so much!

I tend to indicate only when I am switching character perspective. That usually also entails a switch in place and/or time. I like to start each part in medias res and keep the reader guessing for a while. Many people have complained that the story can be a little confusing. I am unsure if it is due to my style or my lack of skill. I want my stories to be engaging and create a sense of mystery and wonder, but I do not want them to be difficult to read. 

I will certainly work on clarity and transitions in the future. Feel free to point out places that could use a rewrite. 

Thank you so much for reading. I am moving towards the final act, and there will definitely be pay-offs for the patient reader ;)

DeamonQueen Replied on September 09, 2017 11:11am

I also suggest you read your last chapter of your update. I think you mussed the spaces. Hope you work out the kinks for this fic. Again, good luck

Author's Response on September 09, 2017 11:21am

Oh my god! Thank you for telling me. It was a technical error and I had no idea. Fixed now! 

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 9 - Harm's Way Revisited on September 09, 2017 07:25am

I must say that this was my favorite chapter so far. I have always had a soft spot for Harmony and it was great reading about her. It was really sad to see her "life" how out of place and lonely she felt. The fact Spike mentioned so much to her even after treating her so badly, also felt sad. When I saw the text in the mirror I realised who the invisible person was. Of course it was Cordelia who contacted Harmony from the Powers.

Wolfram and Hart are gathering strenght again and we have Initiative soldiers on the lose, two bad things. A wonderful scene when Harmony took her strenght back and killed the soldiers.

Author's Response on September 09, 2017 08:55am

Thank you so much. Harmony is a great character, so this was a labour of love.

Wolfram and Hart and the Initiative are both evil, but their agendas are very different. WRH is happy to have magic back, while the Initiative seeks to suppress it. 

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 8 - Babysitter on September 08, 2017 07:11pm

The part with Dawn had a disturbing feeling. I got the feeling that she disappeared when the demons was forced out of the world and this seems to confirm that. 

Spike managed to save the boys and now it seems like he can help bring Dawn back, even if he can't remember her.

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 7 - The Coalition on September 08, 2017 06:57pm

That look at the past showed us that they fell fast.

I was glad to see Harmony, that was a pleasant surprise.

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 6 - Faith, Spike and Dick on September 08, 2017 06:47pm

This sort of broken world (the parts we have seen at least) that are slowly waking up to the supernatural again, reminds me of the Frayverse. Some of the themes and tones in it.

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 5 - The Lone Ranger and the Zeppo on September 08, 2017 04:42pm

 Xander is really down in a bad place. I could totally see Andrew doing something like this.

Author's Response on September 08, 2017 04:50pm

Thanks! I am glad people are responding well to Andrew.

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 4 - Welcome to My Hellmouth on September 08, 2017 04:24pm

I do have a hard time following all this, but apparently I was right about the balance thing.

Author's Response on September 08, 2017 04:34pm

You were absolutely right about "the balance thing" :P

I know I am throwing a lot at you at once and that may narrative style may be frustrating. Bear with me. This is my first ever story. I hope you are enjoying yourself.

Thank you for reading!

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 3 - Sanctuary Revisited on September 08, 2017 04:14pm

It's really a mess with Buffy, Angel and Faith, a lot of issues and old bagage is there.

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