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Joan963z commented on Found on June 16, 2021 12:01pm Liked

This was a great story.  Your writing of the characters was spot on. The story flowed nicely at a good pace. 

Joan 

Author's Response on June 18, 2021 08:44am

Thank you very much! We worked hard to make sure it flowed smoothly, and the it’s important to me to stay true to character. Thanks! 

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Joan963z commented on Volunteer on June 13, 2021 06:37pm Liked

I am really enjoying this story. You have captured everyone's emotions perfectly. I especially thought that Spike's anguish about what to do, when finding Dawn, was well written.

As far as the story flow...I wouldn't have known that two people had written this if you had not told us. Good job.

Joan

 

Author's Response on June 18, 2021 08:45am

We went over every chapter several times to make it smooth. The emotions got pretty heavy in this story, and I’m glad they’re working for you. Thank you! 

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dungbrains commented on Found on April 20, 2021 08:51am

Noooio it’s overrrrrrr

Congratulations to you both this was an epic rewrite I loved it to bits 

and btw I’ve figured it out! Sigyn it’s you! You’re the Key! the key to all fanfic dimensions

you always get characterization right

Utterly believable plots

quite frankly you could pretty much write any story and make it cannon 

love you 

Author's Response on April 21, 2021 05:15am

Oh, my. Well, thank you. I did have help with this one, and was quite grateful for it, but I’ll take the compliment. I try real hard, and it’s gratifying when someone says I got it right. Thank you so much! 

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dungbrains commented on Tormented on April 20, 2021 02:40am

Should have my diabetes levels checked after this 

SO SWEET GAHHHH

Author's Response on April 21, 2021 05:13am

I offer you some bread to sop up the sweetness. So glad you’re reading!

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dungbrains commented on Honcho on April 19, 2021 09:47am

Oh man that ending got me good i’m sobbing like a baby 

it hurts so bad that spike lost his niblet

Author's Response on April 19, 2021 07:36pm

Can I offer a tissue? It's a hard one, for sure, this little AU. I'm glad you're reading. hug

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acekoomboom commented on Found on November 15, 2020 11:54pm

Awwwwwee!! That was such a sweet ending, and I feel like I git a lot of closure. Everyone's ending feels so complete, yet open. I absolutely loved reading this even when it about threw me into a tizzy lol. It was a great spot of fun, and a lot of heartache, and all goodness. They are so domestic together. And that whole scene with the graves was GORGEOUS.

Author's Response on November 21, 2020 10:16pm

I tried to end it as happy as possible given the circumstances. I'm not sure "Willow and Tara" is a better trade off than "Anya and Spike" for a First Evil defeat, but that's where we landed, and it does give us Spuffy. And Dawn, whose experience with a soul was very good for her. Thank you so much for reading, and for giving the whole story back to me in these excellent comments and even mini-essays which have made my own soul just tickled happy. It really made my week. 

acekoomboom Replied on November 23, 2020 11:40am

I'm so happy I could bring you some joy and reminiscing fodder. It's always good to spread some love around! I didn't even think about it as a character trade off haha wasn't even factoring canon in. That's actually pretty funny haha.

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acekoomboom commented on Reborn on November 15, 2020 11:43pm

I love the talk they had outside, and how much pain Spike is in, yet it is all good pain, which makes him fear for the loss of it. So interesting! The world you have created in this fanfic!!

Author's Response on November 21, 2020 10:01pm

Had to give Spike some aftercare once the soul hit, and then some time to process. He didn't go mad this time! (He... uh... went mad before.) 

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acekoomboom commented on Tormented on November 15, 2020 11:36pm

That was so neat, the body reclaiming thing.

Author's Response on November 21, 2020 09:58pm

Buffy knows what Spike needs. 

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acekoomboom commented on Ensouled on November 15, 2020 11:23pm

The fact that he just didn't until Dawn was out of the situation. He loves that girl so freaking much. He is so selfless sometimes. I adore him! This whole boss fight was crazy and wild and chaotic and actually had a really great ending. High stakes and everything.

Author's Response on November 21, 2020 09:58pm

Yeah, poor Spike. He held it in, and held it in, and held it in, and then BROKE! I feel really bad for him, actually, and I did it to him. 

acekoomboom Replied on November 23, 2020 11:37am

And you did it to him aaahahaha

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acekoomboom commented on Sacrifice on November 15, 2020 11:01pm

 that was so poetic and sad and beautiful. Willow and Tara going together just somehow made it feel okay. Made it all right for them to be sacrificing themselves. Horse and! He did so much growing in this universe, face so many inner demons before they had a chance to rear their heads, why does he have to go through this? Why must he keep suffering? Why do you have me in my feelings so hard? What is about to happen to Dawn?! She better survive after all that foolishness.

Author's Response on November 21, 2020 09:57pm

That was Zab. She had this wonderful vision of Tillow going basically on to heaven. Now that I've had time to mature on it, I'm not sure a willing murder/suicide was the best path, though it might have been inevitable. But that's where the story ended up, and I don't regret it.

acekoomboom Replied on November 23, 2020 11:36am

Since it's fiction and not real life, I think we're safe to stick to the bittersweet suicide pact lol. It really was written very well and just made sense for the narrative.

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acekoomboom commented on Key on November 15, 2020 10:52pm

No, not Tara! She was never Eagle, how could she do it? Wait, wait, wait, no can't be done either though, because we work so hard for so long this entire story to redeem her. She can't go out like this at the end! All of the toil and suffering can I be for nothing! Oh I'm so nervous. So many things can go Haywire. How dare Willow do this to her as soon as she has finally gotten happiness! As soon as she had finally come back home. Well she was looking for her room pondering all the things she loved and planning for her future, about to read all of that glorious thought down in her diary, Willow headed to screw everything up. I am not accepting this very well. I'm a little butthurt. I'm super nervous. I might be stamping my foot like a petulant child. I'm just so invested! Don't give me a sad ending!!

Author's Response on November 21, 2020 09:55pm

Yeah... Tara. Poor Tara. And poor Dawn, who didn't need this. This has a bittersweet ending, really, I think. 

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acekoomboom commented on Cursed on November 15, 2020 10:35pm

Everything lined up so perfectly, just as it often beautifully does infection. Spike and Buffy mention Willow, and then Tara bust through the door to tell them about said Willow & Howe she is trying to shove a soul in Dawn, and then Dawn start screaming cuz that's soul got shoved. How is this even going to go? What did Buffy's dream mean? The whole key lock Joyce thing was real confusing to me. My critical thinking skills are not always the greatest. I am not too good at connecting the puzzle pieces beforehand, only backwards in hindsight LOL. I hope this doesn't mess up the family they finally come back to being.

Author's Response on November 21, 2020 09:54pm

Well, the dream was a plot-device, but, you know, Buffy has been known to have those canonically, so. Don't worry if it was confusing, it was always supposed to be symbolic, anyway. 

acekoomboom Replied on November 23, 2020 11:35am

I liked the way it turned out, and in hindsight, the dream was amazing haha.

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acekoomboom commented on Power on November 15, 2020 10:21pm

No Willow! I understand you trusting Miss calendar because you had no reason not to believe it was her, but when she started shifting into all these other people? People that were not dead and certainly could not be coming to you as ghosts? Shouldn't that have been your sign?! Don't do this! You are finally starting to get better, finally starting to see reason. Supporting Tara without pressuring her. Looking into yourself and seeing the decisions you've made in your past from a rational point of view. Standing by Xander Xander because he he is your friend and you trust him. Don't backslide! Don't be the big bad of this fanfiction!

Author's Response on November 21, 2020 09:53pm

Yep, Willow crashed there. 

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acekoomboom commented on Family on November 15, 2020 10:04pm

The classic prodigal son story and I ain't even mad. Dawn came home, and doesn't even want to be Dusk anymore. She processed her death and grieve d for herself. Beautiful! She has matured so much since leaving the nest.

Author's Response on November 20, 2020 01:05am

This is where Dawn finally -- FINALLY! -- starts to process her trauma. All of it, what she became, how she became it. It was badly needed. 

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acekoomboom commented on Blood-Junkie on November 15, 2020 09:45pm

I love what you did with Xan and Anya. They needed some closure and I was wondering what happened with her. 

Author's Response on November 20, 2020 01:04am

Anya was never appreciated for her experience. 

acekoomboom Replied on November 20, 2020 11:02pm

Not 👏 ev 👏 er 👏

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acekoomboom commented on Sucker on November 15, 2020 09:21pm

 Dang Dawn Dusk did not pull any punches! Will this be what finally sends her back to her family?

Author's Response on November 20, 2020 01:03am

She was not happy with Riley. Not at all. 

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acekoomboom commented on Soldier on November 15, 2020 09:08pm

I miss your mom too, kitties. And I'm worried about how Dawn and Rack's stories are going to intertwine. He wanted her... Told Willow to bring her to him all that time ago... Couldn't be any good. I want Dawn back with her family!

Author's Response on November 20, 2020 01:02am

Dawn should absolutely go back home! 

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acekoomboom commented on Ex on November 15, 2020 08:52pm

 The fact that Buffy just laughed in his face is priceless. And omg!! The First is going to use Willow to betray Buffy! That is so wicked cool. So ready for everyone to lay into Riley.

Author's Response on November 20, 2020 01:02am

Oh, we had SO much fun taking Riley apart over this! 

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acekoomboom commented on Parent on November 15, 2020 08:39pm

I love seeming them talk about their wayward child together. So domestic and sad. Scratches that angst itch real nice.

Author's Response on November 20, 2020 01:01am

Spuffy do get hella domestic about Dawn between them, don't they? 

acekoomboom Replied on November 20, 2020 11:01pm

Yeeees

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acekoomboom commented on Honcho on November 15, 2020 08:29pm

The sadness and despair and teenage rebellion. My heart! "She wanted to put her arms around him, and beg him for forgiveness, or tell him she forgave him, or plead with him to just forget the whole terrible night ever happened and start over, pretend that all that had happened was cartoons and pizza and some stupid homework. Then she could come home and play with the kittens and curl up in his lap and... and be family again." 😭😭😭 She is being taken advantage of and likes it just because it feels like freedom. She is playing with powers in Sunnydale that she does not yet understand. And all for what?? So she can drink from the tap and get boinked? I hate it. I hate what has happened to thag murdered little girl. And I love the way Spike said EVERYTHING here. Breaks my heart.

Author's Response on November 20, 2020 01:01am

This chapter where Spike takes the blinkers from her eyes is really hard on poor Dawn/Dusk. She was swept up an idea, and Spike just took the rose-tinted glasses off her. Spike's heart is broken, too. 

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acekoomboom commented on Trusted on November 15, 2020 08:11pm

Kick Willow out already. Dern. Also, that conversation with the scoobies went WAY better than I ever thought it would have! Especially Giles. They just shrugged it off like water rolling down their back. Guess that pre game chat w Xander gave him a new frame of mind. But what is Dawn doing right now??

Author's Response on November 17, 2020 08:49am

It went okay with the Scoobies. And now you see why the pre-game talk was needed, because it sets Xander up to not be a douche about this, but that still leaves that knot of “why are they talking NOW” bit. Oh well. No one’s perfect. 

acekoomboom Replied on November 18, 2020 12:43am

Haha I love this comment. Cackling a bit here.

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acekoomboom commented on One on November 15, 2020 08:02pm

Not what I was expecting!

Author's Response on November 17, 2020 08:48am

Snuggle Spuffy! 

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acekoomboom commented on Son on November 15, 2020 07:59pm

How is Buffy ever going to explain to everyone else why she did not kill Spike lol

Author's Response on November 17, 2020 08:48am

Um.... 

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acekoomboom commented on Enemy on November 15, 2020 07:48pm

He wanted her to kill him! And got sloppy enough to shove the stake into her hand himself. Oh my goodness that was so sad and beautiful, it was agony! Stole the bodies?! Dang I can not handle all these twists and turns!!!!!

Author's Response on November 17, 2020 08:47am

Yep, Spike wanted to go out a Buffy assisted suicide. Poor fellow. 

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acekoomboom commented on Boyfriend on November 15, 2020 07:34pm

Seems like a weird time to stop and have a giant talk about your toxic exes lol. I love Spike's crazy babbling! The patting Xander's head anf giggling. Buffy better go get her man and figure out what the heck happened.

Author's Response on November 17, 2020 08:46am

You are QUITE RIGHT, and this is a flaw in the story. Someone suggested that the talk should have happened in Xander’s car, and I’m like, “Where were you when we were editing?” I’d fix it, but Zab’s not on EF anymore, so it just kind of gets to stay the way it is. Just... imagine it edited and parsed in better. Sorry to leave a big story knot in the middle of a largely seamless story. At least I know it’s a flaw. 

acekoomboom Replied on November 18, 2020 12:41am

I don't think it's a big one though. Felt a bit disjointed but nothing major. I still adored the story 💚

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acekoomboom commented on Boojum on November 15, 2020 07:24pm

He is rambling about his mother and all the people who have sexually assaulted him and I just GAH what is going on? Has the first Evil turned him crazy? Did his soul get shoved in somehow? I am so confused!

Author's Response on November 17, 2020 08:45am

Answers come! (You know that, of course.) 

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acekoomboom commented on Broken on November 15, 2020 07:14pm

She has her own friends now. And they don't even kill! This is turning out better than I had thought it would. Dawn is gonna be okay as Dusk. Spike on the other hand...

Author's Response on November 17, 2020 08:44am

Well, they are vampires, and you know... vampire. Evil. Sort of a thing. 

acekoomboom Replied on November 18, 2020 12:39am

I was so hopeful at this point haha. It was a TRICK I say!

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acekoomboom commented on Watcher on November 15, 2020 07:09pm

Ohhhhh no nononono it keeps getting worse. My poor heart! It keeps intensifying. Why y'all do me like this??

Author's Response on November 17, 2020 08:38am

Yeh... it all kind of collapses here. 

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acekoomboom commented on Daughter on November 15, 2020 07:02pm

These were a horrible sequence of events and I am angry now. My head hurts. Vampires are evil and stupid. And I'm sad.

Author's Response on November 17, 2020 08:38am

Yeah, this was a very hard chapter to write. 

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acekoomboom commented on Body on November 15, 2020 06:55pm

Oh no!!! Dawn you just opened up a can of worms that will never fully close again. Maybe we should think about getting a soul in her. Not through the curse, of course. That's cruel and useless when it can be snatched up again like that. I am so worried for her!

Author's Response on November 17, 2020 08:37am

She really, really shouldn’t have done this... But you know, it’s Sunnydale. Things can’t go easy. 

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