This was a great story. Your writing of the characters was spot on. The story flowed nicely at a good pace.
Thank you very much! We worked hard to make sure it flowed smoothly, and the it’s important to me to stay true to character. Thanks!
I am really enjoying this story. You have captured everyone's emotions perfectly. I especially thought that Spike's anguish about what to do, when finding Dawn, was well written.
As far as the story flow...I wouldn't have known that two people had written this if you had not told us. Good job.
We went over every chapter several times to make it smooth. The emotions got pretty heavy in this story, and I’m glad they’re working for you. Thank you!
Noooio it’s overrrrrrr
Congratulations to you both this was an epic rewrite I loved it to bits
and btw I’ve figured it out! Sigyn it’s you! You’re the Key! the key to all fanfic dimensions
you always get characterization right
Utterly believable plots
quite frankly you could pretty much write any story and make it cannon
Oh, my. Well, thank you. I did have help with this one, and was quite grateful for it, but I’ll take the compliment. I try real hard, and it’s gratifying when someone says I got it right. Thank you so much!
Oh man that ending got me good i’m sobbing like a baby
it hurts so bad that spike lost his niblet
Can I offer a tissue? It's a hard one, for sure, this little AU. I'm glad you're reading.
Awwwwwee!! That was such a sweet ending, and I feel like I git a lot of closure. Everyone's ending feels so complete, yet open. I absolutely loved reading this even when it about threw me into a tizzy lol. It was a great spot of fun, and a lot of heartache, and all goodness. They are so domestic together. And that whole scene with the graves was GORGEOUS.
I tried to end it as happy as possible given the circumstances. I'm not sure "Willow and Tara" is a better trade off than "Anya and Spike" for a First Evil defeat, but that's where we landed, and it does give us Spuffy. And Dawn, whose experience with a soul was very good for her. Thank you so much for reading, and for giving the whole story back to me in these excellent comments and even mini-essays which have made my own soul just tickled happy. It really made my week.
I'm so happy I could bring you some joy and reminiscing fodder. It's always good to spread some love around! I didn't even think about it as a character trade off haha wasn't even factoring canon in. That's actually pretty funny haha.
I love the talk they had outside, and how much pain Spike is in, yet it is all good pain, which makes him fear for the loss of it. So interesting! The world you have created in this fanfic!!
Had to give Spike some aftercare once the soul hit, and then some time to process. He didn't go mad this time! (He... uh... went mad before.)
The fact that he just didn't until Dawn was out of the situation. He loves that girl so freaking much. He is so selfless sometimes. I adore him! This whole boss fight was crazy and wild and chaotic and actually had a really great ending. High stakes and everything.
Yeah, poor Spike. He held it in, and held it in, and held it in, and then BROKE! I feel really bad for him, actually, and I did it to him.
And you did it to him aaahahaha
that was so poetic and sad and beautiful. Willow and Tara going together just somehow made it feel okay. Made it all right for them to be sacrificing themselves. Horse and! He did so much growing in this universe, face so many inner demons before they had a chance to rear their heads, why does he have to go through this? Why must he keep suffering? Why do you have me in my feelings so hard? What is about to happen to Dawn?! She better survive after all that foolishness.
That was Zab. She had this wonderful vision of Tillow going basically on to heaven. Now that I've had time to mature on it, I'm not sure a willing murder/suicide was the best path, though it might have been inevitable. But that's where the story ended up, and I don't regret it.
Since it's fiction and not real life, I think we're safe to stick to the bittersweet suicide pact lol. It really was written very well and just made sense for the narrative.
No, not Tara! She was never Eagle, how could she do it? Wait, wait, wait, no can't be done either though, because we work so hard for so long this entire story to redeem her. She can't go out like this at the end! All of the toil and suffering can I be for nothing! Oh I'm so nervous. So many things can go Haywire. How dare Willow do this to her as soon as she has finally gotten happiness! As soon as she had finally come back home. Well she was looking for her room pondering all the things she loved and planning for her future, about to read all of that glorious thought down in her diary, Willow headed to screw everything up. I am not accepting this very well. I'm a little butthurt. I'm super nervous. I might be stamping my foot like a petulant child. I'm just so invested! Don't give me a sad ending!!
Yeah... Tara. Poor Tara. And poor Dawn, who didn't need this. This has a bittersweet ending, really, I think.
Everything lined up so perfectly, just as it often beautifully does infection. Spike and Buffy mention Willow, and then Tara bust through the door to tell them about said Willow & Howe she is trying to shove a soul in Dawn, and then Dawn start screaming cuz that's soul got shoved. How is this even going to go? What did Buffy's dream mean? The whole key lock Joyce thing was real confusing to me. My critical thinking skills are not always the greatest. I am not too good at connecting the puzzle pieces beforehand, only backwards in hindsight LOL. I hope this doesn't mess up the family they finally come back to being.
Well, the dream was a plot-device, but, you know, Buffy has been known to have those canonically, so. Don't worry if it was confusing, it was always supposed to be symbolic, anyway.
I liked the way it turned out, and in hindsight, the dream was amazing haha.
No Willow! I understand you trusting Miss calendar because you had no reason not to believe it was her, but when she started shifting into all these other people? People that were not dead and certainly could not be coming to you as ghosts? Shouldn't that have been your sign?! Don't do this! You are finally starting to get better, finally starting to see reason. Supporting Tara without pressuring her. Looking into yourself and seeing the decisions you've made in your past from a rational point of view. Standing by Xander Xander because he he is your friend and you trust him. Don't backslide! Don't be the big bad of this fanfiction!
Yep, Willow crashed there.
The classic prodigal son story and I ain't even mad. Dawn came home, and doesn't even want to be Dusk anymore. She processed her death and grieve d for herself. Beautiful! She has matured so much since leaving the nest.
This is where Dawn finally -- FINALLY! -- starts to process her trauma. All of it, what she became, how she became it. It was badly needed.
I love what you did with Xan and Anya. They needed some closure and I was wondering what happened with her.
Anya was never appreciated for her experience.
Not 👏 ev 👏 er 👏
I miss your mom too, kitties. And I'm worried about how Dawn and Rack's stories are going to intertwine. He wanted her... Told Willow to bring her to him all that time ago... Couldn't be any good. I want Dawn back with her family!
Dawn should absolutely go back home!
The fact that Buffy just laughed in his face is priceless. And omg!! The First is going to use Willow to betray Buffy! That is so wicked cool. So ready for everyone to lay into Riley.
Oh, we had SO much fun taking Riley apart over this!
I love seeming them talk about their wayward child together. So domestic and sad. Scratches that angst itch real nice.
Spuffy do get hella domestic about Dawn between them, don't they?
The sadness and despair and teenage rebellion. My heart! "She wanted to put her arms around him, and beg him for forgiveness, or tell him she forgave him, or plead with him to just forget the whole terrible night ever happened and start over, pretend that all that had happened was cartoons and pizza and some stupid homework. Then she could come home and play with the kittens and curl up in his lap and... and be family again." 😭😭😭 She is being taken advantage of and likes it just because it feels like freedom. She is playing with powers in Sunnydale that she does not yet understand. And all for what?? So she can drink from the tap and get boinked? I hate it. I hate what has happened to thag murdered little girl. And I love the way Spike said EVERYTHING here. Breaks my heart.
This chapter where Spike takes the blinkers from her eyes is really hard on poor Dawn/Dusk. She was swept up an idea, and Spike just took the rose-tinted glasses off her. Spike's heart is broken, too.
Kick Willow out already. Dern. Also, that conversation with the scoobies went WAY better than I ever thought it would have! Especially Giles. They just shrugged it off like water rolling down their back. Guess that pre game chat w Xander gave him a new frame of mind. But what is Dawn doing right now??
It went okay with the Scoobies. And now you see why the pre-game talk was needed, because it sets Xander up to not be a douche about this, but that still leaves that knot of “why are they talking NOW” bit. Oh well. No one’s perfect.
Haha I love this comment. Cackling a bit here.
He wanted her to kill him! And got sloppy enough to shove the stake into her hand himself. Oh my goodness that was so sad and beautiful, it was agony! Stole the bodies?! Dang I can not handle all these twists and turns!!!!!
Yep, Spike wanted to go out a Buffy assisted suicide. Poor fellow.
Seems like a weird time to stop and have a giant talk about your toxic exes lol. I love Spike's crazy babbling! The patting Xander's head anf giggling. Buffy better go get her man and figure out what the heck happened.
You are QUITE RIGHT, and this is a flaw in the story. Someone suggested that the talk should have happened in Xander’s car, and I’m like, “Where were you when we were editing?” I’d fix it, but Zab’s not on EF anymore, so it just kind of gets to stay the way it is. Just... imagine it edited and parsed in better. Sorry to leave a big story knot in the middle of a largely seamless story. At least I know it’s a flaw.
I don't think it's a big one though. Felt a bit disjointed but nothing major. I still adored the story 💚
He is rambling about his mother and all the people who have sexually assaulted him and I just GAH what is going on? Has the first Evil turned him crazy? Did his soul get shoved in somehow? I am so confused!
Answers come! (You know that, of course.)
She has her own friends now. And they don't even kill! This is turning out better than I had thought it would. Dawn is gonna be okay as Dusk. Spike on the other hand...
Well, they are vampires, and you know... vampire. Evil. Sort of a thing.
I was so hopeful at this point haha. It was a TRICK I say!
Oh no!!! Dawn you just opened up a can of worms that will never fully close again. Maybe we should think about getting a soul in her. Not through the curse, of course. That's cruel and useless when it can be snatched up again like that. I am so worried for her!
She really, really shouldn’t have done this... But you know, it’s Sunnydale. Things can’t go easy.