A very cute fluffy holiday tale.
Could use some strict editing... Tenses skip back and forth between past and present, even within a paragraph sometimes, and sequences of events are a little sloppy in some places...
Like in one spot, Buffy is topless, then a bit later answers the door to Giles and others with no mention of getting dressed. One assumes she took care of that, but it's a little jarring to read.
In the chapter before this one, Spike's belt hits the floor, then he does something else, and then throws his belt to the floor.
Just needs a little cleanup. But otherwise, very sweet fluff.[Report This]
Be nice spending time reading your story - it's one of the Christmas stories I come back to I'm glad it's not a short work - gives me plenty to enjoy and it gave you a work longer enough to let your explore your characters and the story you wanted to write with plenty of page space.[Report This]