Awwwwwwwww!!! That is just the cutest thing ever!! You should see how he gets when I call him dad, them helping her through a night terror, Buffy pretending that she never thought yum things about Spike. I so badly want to know where this story is going to go, I love it so much. It makes me feel so many emotions in my heart, and I have the biggest smile ever the whole time I'm reading this story. It is so good![Report This]
Really liking this so far. And your writing is just fine. I can follow the conversation well and can tell who is saying what. Can't wait for more!
I would have loved to have seen Angel's reaction to Spike getting custody of Dawn!!! LOL
You know... I hadn't put much thought into getting Angel involved. Maybe he doesn't know about Dawn's custody yet? You've given me ideas... Thanks for your review!
"You know... I hadn't put much thought into getting Angel involved. Maybe he doesn't know about Dawn's custody yet? You've given me ideas... Thanks for your review!"
Glad to have given you some ideas, and you're welcome!
"Is the dialogue confusing?" No, I do not think that it is at all. I have been liking it, actually.
"Can you tell who is saying what?" Yes, yes I can. Nice work! If I could give you a gold star through here, I so would. But here is what I can give: flowers!
"Is everyone else as nitpicky about their own stuff as I am?" No... but that is most likely a bad thing. My stuff would probably be better if I was more nit- picky, but I at least like to think that it is good with out it.
You are so welcome for reading! I am really liking this story, I always love when Spike takes care of Dawn. Here are some reasons why. 1.)It is a way to Spuffy( yes, I know that one is superficial, but it is cute if you use the correct tone, lol)! 2.)It can really open up a lot of story lines. 3.)It makes Buffy and others see Spike as a person, too. 4.)Sometimes Tara playes Mom, because even though Buffy is now with "dad," she is still her sister. Tara mom and Spike dad? Perfection! 5.)The scoobies hate it! 6.)Giles. That is the only word you need in regard to my liking Spike raising Dawn. "Giles." Red faced, 'good Lord's and all. 7.)Interesting in any Spike and Buffy catagory, a.k.a. cannon, AU, different seasons and episode rewrites, human, anything.
Anyway, love it! Keep up the good work, and good luck with all of you futur endovers!
You totally made my day! Thank you for the flowers!!
*blush* you are welcome.
I like Spike living with Dawn, and now Buffy is here. She seems to realize who brought her back. It will be interesting to see how this will go.
I have no trouble with seeing who says what.
Should be a strange dynamic, I think. We'll see! Thanks for reviewing!
You need a diction/wording beta. For example, "The smell of decay clung to her clothes" is correct wording. It's the smell of deay that clings, not the clothes.
You're right, I totally missed that. I had a friend look it over, but she missed it, too.
Great! Great beginnings! Please continue! I had no problem following the conversation, or who was speaking, when they switched.
Thanks!!! I guess the dialogue thing was just my paranoia. Glad you liked it!
The dialogue is fine & easy 2 follow. If it wasn't we would tell u. Can u make the chapters a bit longer?
I am working at making my chapters longer, but for some reason they keep winding up right around 1100 words. Maybe I'll just wait to post until I have two chapters... Thanks for reviewing! Glad you're enjoying it.
Yes, please!!!! Please continue!!!!!!!
I definitely will! I can't believe the responses, I thought this was a one off that no one would read. Thanks so much for reviewing!!