I like the staccato pace you’ve set.
“Joyce had made her decision..” doesn’t read right to me when this is from Buffy’s viewpoint. Thinking it should be “Her mother” as you wrote in the following paragraph. Buffy does’t think of her by her first name. Myself bumping up against my threescore and ten do not think of my mother by her first name.
Glad that someone mentioned the spell this early and also that Buffy appears to be staying. She is staying, right?
You create a much more sympathetic and appealing Joyce. At least she is willing to attempt to reach out to her daughter instead of attempt to force her into the ill-fitting box that she believes Buffy should embrace. Her thought process and feelings were clearly torn and confused but I approve of the fact that she came down firmly on the side of her daughter instead of her own side. This is an improvement. Thanks.[Report This]
The description of the soul entering Spike was very vivid. Wonderful emotional response of confusion and despair and self loathing swirled in a chaotic mess of known wrongness. Nicely done.
Not sure why Buffy immediately attacked Spike about about the love issue and that he seemed to accept the abuse somewhat passively. At least it didn't turn into a knock-down drag out so that Dru woke up before they were done. That would have been an issue for the emotionally damaged Slayer.
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Obviously this is well tread ground, but you write well and that's really the most important thing. I have just read a few of your stories and already you have written a couple of great emotional/intense scenes which I thought were such strong points in your shorter works.
The scene with Buffy returning home being my favorite.
I am really looking forward to continuing on with this fic.
Thank you so much!
I think they needed that emotional outburst. It cleared the air and now maybe they can have a better realtionship. Although Joyce is going to be disappointed to find out that normal doesn't exist for Buffy.
Poor Spike!! I wonder what crazy plan Dru is working on?
Yeah, we'll have to see how Joyce handles the lack of normality in Buffy's life.
Honestly? I think this is better than her running off to LA. I can understand why Joyce lashed out. But it didn't seem like the months Buffy was in LA did any good. Joyce basically just buried her head in the sand again when Buffy came back. Now maybe things will work out better. And seriously Buffy is right. Kendra's death called a new slayer. That girl is the Chosen One now. Buffy can retire if she wants. Let someone else do the heavy lifting for a while.
My thoughts exactly! I want them to work things out versus both of them basically running away from their problems not only as mother and daughter but as Slayer and person Slayer needs to protect - if that makes any sense. Haha. Thanks![Report This]
Really interesting .. I'll certainly read this fic. My favorite part was the last two paragraphs, I never read such a good, heartfelling description of a vampire (in the Buffy verse) getting a soul. It was amazing. Well done!
Spike getting his soul early always has good potential in a story. But why did it happen? Did Willow try the spell again? There are many ways this story could go, I'll just wait and see.
I always like the idea of Spike getting his soul early and how that affects things. But too often I read fic where he gets his soul early and suddenly all of those hard things Buffy has to go through no longer matter because soul!Spike is here to save the day - which I can't stand. . I thought I would try it out and do things in a way that I think is true to the show but still unique-ish.
I always like the idea of Spike getting his soul early and how that affects things. But too often I read fic where he gets his soul early and suddenly all of those hard things Buffy has to go through no longer matter because soul!Spike is here to save the day - which I can't stand. . I thought I would try it out and do things in a way that I think is true to the show but still unique-ish.[Report This]