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Joyce commented on Chapter 3 on July 09, 2019 08:59pm

Buffy kept secrets because Giles told her to.

Joyce ignored everything because apparently she went with the flow of Sunnydale residents. Buffy is being way too harsh.

Really liking your Drusilla dialogue!

 

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Joyce commented on Chapter 2 on July 09, 2019 08:48pm

I like the staccato pace you’ve set.

“Joyce had made her decision..” doesn’t read right to me when this is from Buffy’s viewpoint. Thinking it should be “Her mother” as you wrote in the following paragraph. Buffy does’t think of her by her first name. Myself bumping up against my threescore and ten do not think of my mother by her first name.

Glad that someone mentioned the spell this early and also that Buffy appears to be staying. She is staying, right?

 

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Joyce commented on Chapter 1 on July 09, 2019 08:32pm

Despite what you said about being a mediocre writer, I’m loving this. You hit emotionally. I especially love Spike’s comeback to Buffy regarding her question.

 

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jhiz commented on Chapter 3 on January 26, 2016 04:16am

Creepy description of the damage and torture Dru was doing to poor ensouled Spike.  Again, you created wonderfully vivid images.

I am sorry that there is not more of this story.  I appreciate that you shared what you did.

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jhiz commented on Chapter 2 on January 26, 2016 04:08am

You create a much more sympathetic and appealing Joyce.  At least she is willing to attempt to reach out to her daughter instead of attempt to force her into the ill-fitting box that she believes Buffy should embrace.  Her thought process and feelings were clearly torn and confused but I approve of the fact that she came down firmly on the side of her daughter instead of her own side.  This is an improvement.  Thanks.

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jhiz commented on Chapter 1 on January 26, 2016 03:59am

The description of the soul entering Spike was very vivid.  Wonderful emotional response of confusion and despair and self loathing swirled in a chaotic mess of known wrongness.  Nicely done.

Not sure why Buffy immediately attacked Spike about about the love issue and that he seemed to accept the abuse somewhat passively.  At least it didn't turn into a knock-down drag out so that Dru woke up before they were done.  That would have been an issue for the emotionally damaged Slayer.

Thank you for sharing.

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fyreburned commented on Chapter 3 on April 18, 2014 06:40am Liked

Am hoping for more soon! 

Author's Response on July 18, 2014 09:01am

I am definitely going to add more - just having a bit of writer's block.

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ILoveLamp commented on Chapter 3 on March 16, 2014 06:13am Liked

beginning.
Obviously this is well tread ground, but you write well and that's really the most important thing. I have just read a few of your stories and already you have written a couple of great emotional/intense scenes which I thought were such strong points in your shorter works.

The scene with Buffy returning home being my favorite.

I am really looking forward to continuing on with this fic.

Author's Response on March 16, 2014 12:29pm

Thank you so much!

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ginar369 commented on Chapter 3 on March 15, 2014 11:18am Liked

I think they needed that emotional outburst. It cleared the air and now maybe they can have a better realtionship. Although Joyce is going to be disappointed to find out that normal doesn't exist for Buffy.

Poor Spike!! I wonder what crazy plan Dru is working on?

Author's Response on March 16, 2014 12:29pm

Yeah, we'll have to see how Joyce handles the lack of normality in Buffy's life. 

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 3 on March 15, 2014 07:06am

Well done how Buffy and Joyce are dealing with this situation. They are both scared and worried for each other.

Author's Response on March 16, 2014 12:28pm

Thanks!

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 2 on August 09, 2013 08:09am

This is good, how they think and react. Joyce will like that Buffy wants to quit being the Slayer.



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Thanks!

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ginar369 commented on Chapter 2 on August 08, 2013 10:26pm Liked

Honestly? I think this is better than her running off to LA. I can understand why Joyce lashed out. But it didn't seem like the months Buffy was in LA  did any good. Joyce basically just buried her head in the sand again when Buffy came back. Now maybe things will work out better. And seriously Buffy is right. Kendra's death called a new slayer. That girl is the Chosen One now. Buffy can retire if she wants. Let someone else do the heavy lifting for a while.



Author's Response:

My thoughts exactly! I want them to work things out versus both of them basically running away from their problems not only as mother and daughter but as Slayer and person Slayer needs to protect - if that makes any sense. Haha. Thanks!

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490440 commented on Chapter 1 on July 02, 2013 12:53am

I like your stuff, but I can't stand wips. I get into a story and then Bam! Its all over:(



Author's Response:

I know how you feel. I'll try to get new chapters out as soon as I can but I can't make any promises.

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poison and despair commented on Chapter 1 on June 19, 2013 09:20pm

Really interesting .. I'll certainly read this fic. My favorite part was the last two paragraphs, I never read such a good, heartfelling description of  a vampire (in the Buffy verse) getting a soul. It was amazing. Well done!



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Thanks!

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zanthinegirl commented on Chapter 1 on June 18, 2013 10:31pm

Intriguing beginning; I'm looking forwrd to seeing where you take this.  Really nice detail in this chapter!



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Thanks!

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magnus374 commented on Chapter 1 on June 16, 2013 07:45am

Spike getting his soul early always has good potential in a story. But why did it happen? Did Willow try the spell again? There are many ways this story could go, I'll just wait and see.



Author's Response:

I always like the idea of Spike getting his soul early and how that affects things. But too often I read fic where he gets his soul early and suddenly all of those hard things Buffy has to go through no longer matter because soul!Spike is here to save the day - which I can't stand. . I thought I would try it out and do things in a way that I think is true to the show but still unique-ish.



Author's Response:

I always like the idea of Spike getting his soul early and how that affects things. But too often I read fic where he gets his soul early and suddenly all of those hard things Buffy has to go through no longer matter because soul!Spike is here to save the day - which I can't stand. . I thought I would try it out and do things in a way that I think is true to the show but still unique-ish.

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