I hear it in the slap of the wipers during the brief shower in the middle of the Mexican idea of spring when the desert blooms for three days and the sun hides for a moment behind cottonball clouds that fill the sky with thunderous rumblings.
this first part was so beautifully written. I could both see it and hear it. It's also a very confusing piece. He wants her and thinks about loving her. Then he gets so made at her and instead of wanting to be with her he wants to punish her. Even though she ends up enjoying it. It still seems pretty violent especially when he treats he rudely after wards. I'm sure that can't be good for her self esteem. I would like to see you follow up on this fic. You are definely a good writer[Report This]
This is the second time I've read this and I have to say that I like the way this is written. Spike's voice is authentic and his thoughts justify his actions. It makes me wonder about Buffy's POV and also how this relationship is going to develop.
Author's Response: I've never really thought of continuing this particular piece, but now you have me thinking...thank you for your review and I appreciate the support! :) And the idea!