The Joyce thing is coming and it's breaking my heart! I don't know if I will be able to take it. And I love that her friends are not completely oblivious. Xander just gained like 3000 points in my book because at least he wasn't insisting she chase after Riley this time, her obvious reluctance changed his outlook and that is wonderful.[Report This]
I was hoping for a Joyce fix too...oh my broken heart! I love their little clandestine meetings at the safehouse and the carefully thought out things they need to change. So well done. Buffy picking fights with Riley on purpose is delicious. And Buffy being so not impressed with Dracula...lol.[Report This]
I feel solid solidarity with this future Buffy about being squicked out by Riley. lol. This was a lovely chapter full of depth and details. I loved Buffy being mad at Willow for bouncing her to a kissing spot, and Spike reminding her she prolly didn't do it a purpose. Guilty conscious there makes her quick to blame.[Report This]
Okay, this line was so perfect and so spot on:
“Trust me, this feels right.” she shrugged. “Besides, it’s a hell of a lot better than Plan A.”
He eyed her warily. “Glad you didn’t let Red try that one. Fixing an unnatural slayer problem by making more unnatural slayers was about the most hare-brained scheme ever.”
The attention to detail in this first chapter was a rare treat and well done. I especially liked the tension between Buffy and Giles. I so rarely see the consequences of his repeated betrayals of Buffy's trust in fanfiction. She loves him like a father, but he can't be relied upon to read her in, to trust her. It's so true to life it makes my heart ache and I love seeing it written well with no bashing. This is such a lovely first chapter and I'm so excited to read the rest.
This fic... where do I even begin? The last few days, every spare moment I had I've been reading it (including some not so spare moments that were supposed to be for sleep). I was sucked in so deep that I didn't really notice time passing, I just needed to know what happened next. You have crafted such an amazing story and I love everything about it from the character/relationship development to all the little in-jokes they have. Great job, thank you so much for sharing it![Report This]
You did an admirable treatment for the Buffy and Giles separation - it works just right with your treatment thus farfor them in this story. Tara is another outstanding character variation to the series events.
I am enjoying reading this again very much.[Report This]
This is one of my favorite stories (though it left me many a sleepless night as I worried about the ultimate fate of all of those pillows :P ). You did a fantastic job with this, really building a relationship with nuances and depth. Great job.[Report This]
I really enjoyed my re-read of this long story! And I will for sure be reading the sequel. I'm looking forward to it.
Things I really enjoyed:
--the basic premise of the story: namely, that the solution for the First Evil provided in Chosen doesn't make sense, and that something else has to be done
--the slow build of trust for Spuffy, especially Henry. I hope he has plot things to do in subsequent stories.
--the Spuffy kids
A few other thoughts:
--treatment of Willow. Honestly, she was shunned so hard, I bet she'd be evil by now. You could drive someone into it, and if i were her, I'd kill them all. I don't mind Willow being dealt with that way, but it felt like they chose to act a certain way towards her and never suffered the inevitable fallout.
--the in-jokes and code between our main characters, while cute at first, eventually become a bit annoying for me. Essentially, I need some kind of code solution spreadsheet to have the least idea about what they're talking about, even in heavily plotted scenes. It started to become hard to buy that anyone would talk that way, even a couple with intimacy issues.
--the final chapters sort of dropped new plot threads on us without adding much to the story. They almost felt like their own separate thing. And the final conflict between Buffy and Spike (she was mad at him for dying) seemed awfully overblown, with both Buffy and Angel acting like it was a big revealable secret. I'm not sure the ending worked for me structurally.[Report This]
I think that instead of this story I'd like to read porn where Henry picks up some girl in New York, intending a one-night stand, but there's something about her, and this time, he falls in love, and can't handle it, and screws up terribly, and breaks his heart. Maybe he'll get her in the end, or not; I don't really care. Also, in their sex scene, he must use his super strength to have sex with her standing up.[Report This]
... I honestly don't really get all the timey-wimey theorizing in this chapter; it got too abstract. Willow can magic a pregnancy? But now she won't? But they may have to go back in time to the past when she does it? But she hasn't done it yet? But WHAAAAAAAAAAA
Why can't they just wait for the Glory thing to be over, Willow to be trained, and then they can say, oh hey Willow, can you help us with a magical pregnancy? OR if they're not allowed to suggest it, Buffy could say, gosh, I sure wish I could have kids.[Report This]
"All that slayer power running loose would make the crack in the door from the resurrection spell turn into a wide open gate, complete with red carpet."
Yeah, really. That's sort of the problem with Chosen, isn't it? It makes literally no sense as a plot.[Report This]