You did an admirable treatment for the Buffy and Giles separation - it works just right with your treatment thus farfor them in this story. Tara is another outstanding character variation to the series events.
I am enjoying reading this again very much.[Report This]
This is one of my favorite stories (though it left me many a sleepless night as I worried about the ultimate fate of all of those pillows :P ). You did a fantastic job with this, really building a relationship with nuances and depth. Great job.[Report This]
I really enjoyed my re-read of this long story! And I will for sure be reading the sequel. I'm looking forward to it.
Things I really enjoyed:
--the basic premise of the story: namely, that the solution for the First Evil provided in Chosen doesn't make sense, and that something else has to be done
--the slow build of trust for Spuffy, especially Henry. I hope he has plot things to do in subsequent stories.
--the Spuffy kids
A few other thoughts:
--treatment of Willow. Honestly, she was shunned so hard, I bet she'd be evil by now. You could drive someone into it, and if i were her, I'd kill them all. I don't mind Willow being dealt with that way, but it felt like they chose to act a certain way towards her and never suffered the inevitable fallout.
--the in-jokes and code between our main characters, while cute at first, eventually become a bit annoying for me. Essentially, I need some kind of code solution spreadsheet to have the least idea about what they're talking about, even in heavily plotted scenes. It started to become hard to buy that anyone would talk that way, even a couple with intimacy issues.
--the final chapters sort of dropped new plot threads on us without adding much to the story. They almost felt like their own separate thing. And the final conflict between Buffy and Spike (she was mad at him for dying) seemed awfully overblown, with both Buffy and Angel acting like it was a big revealable secret. I'm not sure the ending worked for me structurally.[Report This]
I think that instead of this story I'd like to read porn where Henry picks up some girl in New York, intending a one-night stand, but there's something about her, and this time, he falls in love, and can't handle it, and screws up terribly, and breaks his heart. Maybe he'll get her in the end, or not; I don't really care. Also, in their sex scene, he must use his super strength to have sex with her standing up.[Report This]
... I honestly don't really get all the timey-wimey theorizing in this chapter; it got too abstract. Willow can magic a pregnancy? But now she won't? But they may have to go back in time to the past when she does it? But she hasn't done it yet? But WHAAAAAAAAAAA
Why can't they just wait for the Glory thing to be over, Willow to be trained, and then they can say, oh hey Willow, can you help us with a magical pregnancy? OR if they're not allowed to suggest it, Buffy could say, gosh, I sure wish I could have kids.[Report This]
"All that slayer power running loose would make the crack in the door from the resurrection spell turn into a wide open gate, complete with red carpet."
Yeah, really. That's sort of the problem with Chosen, isn't it? It makes literally no sense as a plot.[Report This]
I was expecting a comedic romp and got a drama filled adventure. Dam good show. while I have read quite a few time travel fix it fics I do believe this is the first that had the act of going back affect the future of the characters. Now that sounds contradictory but what I mean by it is that the act of going back actually opened up plot lines beyond the end of the show. A lot of the time travel stories have the traveler going back and fixing the things they want changed, but the repercussions of the act never affect the 'Buffy' world beyond the shows ending. I'm probably not explaining it right... but I can't think of a better way to at the moment. So I'll leave it be. On to the Review.
The concept of the story is not original, in that it is about going back in time to stop the rise of The First. The use of Whistler was done very well. A lot of people tend to have him as a throw away character but you built a wonderful backstory around this character. It opened up a path that no one knew 'could' have existed. And he introduced a way to continue the shows narrative past its ending. Agents of the PTB would be an profound paradigm shift for Buffy's life. While the similarities between watchers and the PTB might seem similar the scale on which the two entities operate is so fundamentally different that it actually took me by surprise. The scene when Whistler is explaining 'catching the stones', and later when Buffy realizes that they were in Willow's 'pond'. It really brought into focus the types of games the Powers were playing. It went beyond battle fields and into a realm where metaphor wasn't just a colorful way to express a thought or idea but as literal interpretation of reality. Where being cryptic isn't just for mystery but because there is quite literally no better way to tell someone what it is that's going to happen or needs to happen. Now I'm fanboying it up just a bit but I can't help it. I 'am' a fan. Not only of the show but of you as well. I shall look for other stories you've written, and read those that have been finished. Until next time. Thank you for the story.[Report This]
just read this for the second time I not good with words so I want to re-read it and get my thoughts together :) I love this story I thought it was great! and can't wait for the next installment. the only thing was well I know buffy loves Spike I mean she fought the power for him but it still seem like Spike love Buffy more then she love him. though I really loved this story and will be reading it again :)[Report This]
I absolutely love this from start to finish. I'm not sure if it's your unique spin on the whole Spuffy thing or the compelling style of writing, or maybe the confusing time travel plot with far too many references that suddenly all make perfect sense, but this story is beautiful and definitely one of my favourites. And that much actually was obvious to me after only a few chapters. This is seriously great.
I'm a little conflicted about the characterizations though, or at least about Buffy's characterization. That's not to say that she was portrayed in a bad way - the exact opposite is the case - but I somewhat felt that she wasn't really like I would expect her to be after season 7. Maybe it's just me seeing things differently because I find this Buffy far more believable (and interesting) than the image I had in my mind. Or maybe there was a little more creative freedom involved than I thought it'd be, which again is perfectly fine.
Because this story is great. And I love it. So, so much. Wow.
The Buffy characterization stems primarily from two things: I yanked her out of season seven just before that final, definitive fight and I then gave her the unheard of (in canon) gift of time to reflect and breathe by dumping her in season five. Pretty much everything else grew from that. That approach does admittedly lead to a characterization that simultaneously feels both in and out of canon. Ditto for Spike, really.
This story shouts "Season Five Fix It Fic!" from its rooftop, but the framing of the house is "what happens if the season seven versions of those two characters can (sort of) relax in the relative safety of an old, familiar situation?" Echoes was always more about rewriting Chosen than the The Gift, in both characterization and plot (hence the heavy use of Chosen references at key points, particularly leading into the Glory showdown, and that showdown ending as it did).
Thanks so much for the kind words. Echoes was my first completed multi-chapter fic, and thus holds a special place in my heart, despite the parts of it that make me cringe today. I love that you love it.
One of the best stories I've read in a long time. Compelling storyline, lots of twists to keep you on your toes, great insights into character motivation ... loved the natural growth of the characters as opposed to the sudden "epiphany and instant change" some authors opt for instead ... eagerly anticipating the sequel.[Report This]
I have really enjoyed this fic. What a ride! I have a soft spot for Time Travel fics and yours didn't disappoint at all. What I loved the most was how fair you wrote all the characters, you made us understand where they're coming from and they were real and true to their canon versions. I felt so bad for Willow throughout the fic. I enjoyed every single character here and how the story unfolded.
I agree with you about S5 Xander being level-headed and open-minded. Fanfic writers seem to forget that Xander didn't judge Buffy when he thought she was sleeping with Spike in Intervention, that he sympathized with Spike and tried to lessen Buffy's anger towards him in the end of the episode, that he lit Spike's cigarette when Spike's hand was injured... even S6 where Xander was at his most anti-Spike stage had Xander telling Buffy that he felt sad for Spike because he understood having an unrequited love for Buffy, Spike was invited to Xander's wedding, Xander didn't object to having Spike at Buffy's birthday party and even played cards with him. So, he's not the hopeless case Spuffy fics portray him as. He just needs a little nudge.[Report This]
Really wonderful story! I can't wait to read the sequel especially after the teaser that is. Christmas at the Folly. So many questions and potential theories are running through my head. You have made several days of being sick in bed infinitely more enjoyable. Keep up the great work and I look forward to reading more in the future.[Report This]